Did you ever feel happy deep in your mind?
I do recently. I've never been so cheerful. Because I face with the trouble that confused me a long time. It's really wonderful, I think if you could open your mind and confirming what happened in your heart, finally fight with it, against it, you can make your daily life better.
I don't know what's that means. But I felt it deeply and know what I am doing now. If you lose something, THAT'S ok, that's fine. Because there are no always winner in the world. But if you could find why you were lose, what you lost. You may feel better, and fill in your heart something, it's just a new begining.
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Hi. I'll try to give you examples of some of the common problems I see; thank you for fixing the comma and paragraph problems I mentioned before!
--Tense matching. "recently" and "do" in this post don't go together; you need "I have felt that way recently." or something like that. In the same paragraph, you mix "could" with "can". Also you don't use parallel construction in that paragraph--"if you could open your mind and confirming... (these don't match!).
Then you have two verbs in the next sentence: "what's that means." Also, don't start a sentence with "because" or other such conjunctions, unless you are sure of avoiding a sentence fragment--which you don't here.
Two verbs in "were lose"--just use one: "why you lost".
You have several comma splices in this post, too. Well, that's a lot for a single post with only two paragraphs. You should make sure to avoid these problems next time.
Thanks. . .more notes in other posts.
PS, the title word is misspelled, though I know a recent movie spelled it this way intentionally; maybe you did so on purpose as well, but I don't know why.
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